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Reviewer: Mia Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/22/2008 - 10:17 pm Title: Where are you?

Hey guys, just noticed for chapter 1 - you'll see the last half of the page is in italics. To fix this go to edit, and after the word 'something' , put < / i > but without the spaces, which will stop the rest from being in italics.

Author's Response: will do! Thanks *Hugs!*

Reviewer: Spikes mrs Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/13/2008 - 10:36 pm Title: Where are you?

Okay I'm sorry but there are just too many mistakes in the first few paragraphs for me to even think about finishing the whole chapter....

You need to looking at the spacing as well because it's kooky.... And if a 12 year old wrote this chapter, I believe the lanuage should be toned down a tad....I wouldn't except that from my own daughter who's 19...

I think you have a good idea but you really need to think about presentation and style, all writers have their own and yours could do with alot of work Sweetie...

I really hate posting a review like this but I really think you need to rethink your whole chapter and rewrite it using spell~checker on word plus the grammar check. If you haven't got those look at a dictonary and your english text books for help with how to write a story...

At your age you should be aiming for Flesch~Kincaid grade level of at least 8~9....

Hope you sort out your problems and don't think this was in any way a review to disway you from writing....

Spikes Mrs

Author's Response: yeah i know but i'm trying to get a beta and ill be editing it and well yes my little sister wrote it she's a little bad mouth around her friends and me and she dosen't mind it so that ones for her and i cant spell ether i get like all D's in that class so yeah we despretly need a beta and we will try to get one we're trying varry hard! if you know any that would be wonderfull! Thanks, Amy

Reviewer: Ashleigh Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/13/2008 - 03:05 am Title: Where are you?

I would have to agree. If you have so many mistakes in just the summary alone, people would usually not even give the story a chance. I know you're young and this is your first one, but I would really suggest getting a beta reader to look over the chapters before you post them, they really can do wonders with a story. Just a little something to think about.

Author's Response: Hey no prob i just fixed it actualy well th first one anyway, i have no idea where to get a beta but if you know of one please let me know! TY Candie

Reviewer: Wanting to be helpful Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/13/2008 - 03:02 am Title: Where are you?

Hi there. I don't want you to be discouraged, but I *do* want to be honest , and in being honest I have to say that while plot-wise this might be of interest, the number of mistakes in your summary and authors note alone are staggering, and surely enough to put most readers off. I suggest you take a moment to read through and take out all the misplaced commas, make sure you are using appropriate spacing and, most importantly, sort out your spelling. I'm sure if you used the spell-checker in whatever program you're using that half the mistakes would be taken care of...and the rest could be addressed simply by you being vigilant and taking the time to correct them.

Author's Response: thanks sry im really not good at spelling so i'll be sure to check it out TY!

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