Date: 08/16/2010 - 05:42 am Title: Just for tonight
Loved your ending - great way to bring in all the pain and sorrow and tragic effect from her being taken out of her "resting place & heavenly realm" back into the world - and the loss of all joy and peace that should could have had in her life again.
Really glad that you did not have them stay together - your ending feels right. It leaves your reader with all the tragic self-inflicted misery that she brought to herself and gave to Spike.
You have several small errors of tense and sentence structures that you should try to fix - especially as this is such a good first effort and such a good story about a subject that many writers would never try to write about.
Date: 08/01/2010 - 05:58 am Title: Just for tonight
Beautiful story, I usually don't like the sad ones. You wrote it with such skill too. Thank you for writing it and good luck with any future stories!
Date: 07/30/2008 - 10:50 am Title: Just for tonight
Ooooo *tear* more please loving it so far.
Date: 07/30/2008 - 01:06 am Title: Just for tonight
I'm really enjoying this story. I hope you continue.
Author's Response: thanks...i actually was planning to rewrite only the bathroom scene. and then i thought a Buffy pov would be nice...i'm not sure i can go further...but if you guys like it, i'll try my best
Date: 07/29/2008 - 09:31 pm Title: Just for tonight
Please continue!
Author's Response: you think i should??...i'm not sure
Date: 07/29/2008 - 07:32 pm Title: Just for tonight
How sad! Still loved it, though. Looking forward to more.
Author's Response: thanks a lot...i'm not sure there'll be more.but i'm glad you loved it :D