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Reviewer: Lily Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 01/26/2013 - 05:29 am Title: Chapter 2

I like the premise of the story, and I think you capture the character voices well, but I'm curious about your use of present tense. Is there a reason you chose to write in present tense rather than past?

Author's Response: Thanks and yup. Simply because I suck at tenses. I swapped homework assignments in high school. My friend did my English homework and I did her math. :) I had two beta's for this story. But the one who was keeping an eye on that kind of stuff had a family emergency and had to stop. So sorry it might happen again.

Reviewer: Rose Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/15/2012 - 09:52 pm Title: Chapter 2

Anya has the right solution, just stop beating up on Spike and you won't get headaches. Of course Willow just had to try doing a spell.

Author's Response: Seemed simple to me too. But you know those Scooby's they can be kind of dense some times.

Reviewer: sallyntmare Anonymous Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/15/2012 - 06:23 pm Title: Chapter 2

Loved it!! Such an original premises . So funny when Buffy and Xander felt the pain. I wonder what's up with Riley. Like that Buffy was told her and Spike need to protect her. And spike is immune to her? Very interested.

Author's Response: Thanks! I got a chuckle out of it too. (is that bad of me?)

Reviewer: All4Spike Signed Liked [Report This]
Date: 12/15/2012 - 04:55 pm Title: Chapter 2

So glad that both Riley and Xander got bad headaches :-)
So we have a different Hellgod (or 'old one'). And poor old Drogyn dead by RTA. Fascinating.
Loving the original plot, but It might be a good idea to find a beta who can sort out your tenses. You seem to drift from present narrative tense to past narrative tense and back again at random, sometimes within a single sentence. Also your dialogue punctuation is slightly... eccentric.

Author's Response: I do have a beta we must have missed that. I'll go over it when I have some time and fix the errors.

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