This was an okay story. You need to work on your spelling though. It's Joss Whedon, not Josh like you put in the very first chapter.
I think that the story moved too fast. I think you could have slowed it down in most parts and given more detail. The only time you seemed to use lots of detail was the sex scene.
Just my thoughts although you really should get a beta reader just to edit the spelling and grammatical errors.