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Reviewer: Jo Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 02/24/2005 - 03:51 pm Title: Meeting

First i would say that i like this story but i think there are some things that would make it better. For starters i think it needs more detail, and it all seems very rushed. As a writer myself i know that detail is one of the most important things in a story and i just feel like nothing is described or explained a great deal here and i think the fic would be a lot more enjoyable if there was more of both. Also, i would say on the subject of it being rushed, everything just happens too quickly. Buffy only just meets spike and suddenly she's kissing him and that just doesn't work. You need to build up to it. Same with a lot of other things, it all just happens to fast. However you are a good writer and i do think this is a good idea and could be a great story i just think that in places it needs some work. Please don't feel like i am trying to discourage you in any way because i know that sometimes a review can seem that way, i just want to help you make your story the best it can be and i think this could be great. If you wanna talk about anything i said or ever want any help you can email me at joannewelsh76@hotmail.com

Reviewer: songgal1 Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/21/2005 - 04:37 am Title: Meeting

please, put collide by howie day in this fic...it's just too perfect! The dawn is breaking A light shining through You're barely waking And I'm tangled up in you Yeah I'm open, you're closed Where I follow, you'll go I worry I won't see your face Light up again Even the best fall down sometimes Even the wrong words seem to rhyme Out of the doubt that fills my mind I somehow find You and I collide I'm quiet you know You make a frist impression I've found I'm scared to know I'm always on your mind Even the best fall down sometimes Even the stars refuse to shine Out of the back you fall in time I somehow find You and I collide Even the best fall down sometimes Even the wrong words seem to ryhme Out of the doubt that fills your mind You finally find You and I collide You finally find You and I collide You finally find You and I collide

Reviewer: BuffyandSpikeForever Signed [Report This]
Date: 02/21/2005 - 02:03 am Title: Meeting

good so far

Reviewer: blondiebear Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 02/20/2005 - 05:24 pm Title: Meeting

loved it!! great start! please post soon

Reviewer: Erin Anonymous [Report This]
Date: 02/20/2005 - 03:15 pm Title: Meeting

Nice start! I can't wait to see where you go with it.

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