Date: 03/20/2005 - 10:07 am Title: Chapter 1
great premise, i absolutely love it :) my only nitpicky thing is that you seem to fluctuate in your use of past and present tense, not only between paragraphs and different sentences, but also within the same sentences, for example
"He *hasn’t* even made her feel like she *was* welcome or that he *was* pleased..." I suggest you be aware of this coz it makes the story harder to read and detracts from your otherwise great writing.... please don't think im being mean or anything, im just a friendly reviewer trying to be helpful- my advice is here, use it or don't- i'll still keep reading this cool story :)
Author's Response: Well... I don't really have beta, i don't think you can call mine an actual beta but i'll try to look out for those, thanks for the tip.
Date: 03/05/2005 - 12:07 am Title: Chapter 1
good update
Date: 03/03/2005 - 10:07 pm Title: Chapter 1
Wow - not bad. Looking forward to read more.
Date: 03/03/2005 - 02:23 pm Title: Chapter 1
lovin it so far. love how buffys not afraid to stand up to spike. great job n great chapter. cant wait for more.
Date: 03/03/2005 - 04:35 am Title: Chapter 1
awesome job! love where this is leading...just be warned there have been other nanny stories before this one so please keep it different!