oh my heavens!!! i couldn't keep from laughing - I CAN'T BREATHE!!! and this is the second time i've read this one, too. without going too much into my life let's just so i have absolutely no knowledge of the stuff in the comedy routines in this delightul story - but i do have friends and family, and those relations love to TALK. so my ears aren't so um.. that thought even sounds gross. but you got the idea ...
truly, laugh-out-loud hysterical IN THE GOOD WAY!

I think it might too much to hope for another chapter ? Too bad, really loved the story and the original approach.

Maybe you lost the muse to create an ending to this story. I read it on another site. Maybe chpt. 5 is where it should end. But I would have loved a chapter 6.

IT kind of seems somewhat hypocritical to me that girls are always critical of guys who want them to "suck them off" but yet they expect those same guys to give them oral sex. Cum is cum.. Whether it is men's or women's The only thing different is the amount. And in fact studies have shown that there is more acid in women's than men's so if any person who should be griping it is them. But that is just me... I say if you expect him to do it for you, you should od it for him.. I love this story...kind of hard to follow but I eventually caught on.

I doubt Gah... would be an original review, but it's all I have to offer right now... Again, a great mix of humour and sexiness--please, keep 'em coming! Uh, you can take that however you want ;)

very very curious to see what happens next

Finally read this here after trying for hours over at AFF!! GREAT chapter hun. Soooo damn funny and sooooo damn sexy, and the two compliment each other really well. Love this fic - you are hysterical and we already knew about the hotness of your writing. Can't wait for more of this. Sarah x

Hey its not that I don't love this fic too, but yes, Delvin, I'll get down on my knees for you... in a tottaly non-sexual way that is. (unless... heh nvm). I was giggling so bad reading this. Your too funny! Would it bug you to beg for some AtP too??

This is turning out interesting.....I like it. This being a bit different makes it interesting/ challenging for you to write (in a good way) I hope. Also good to you understand there's a Devlin munity afoot!

No, Pattyanne--we got the treat. A right yummy one at that! I absolutely loved the format you used in this chapter, with the humour interspersed between the rest of the story. Good job, and can't wait to read more!

definitly earned that treat.what an amazing chapter keep it up

Haha I loved it! The last line of course is hilarious as is the rest of the chapter. I like Buffys skit, i've seen it happen with my parents and my friends hehe so true! Thanks so much. This fic is really cool I love seeing the updates for it!